This story is really scary. But I was distracted from the horror of it by the overuse of a certain word.
Dear writers: there is a wonderful resource called a thesaurus. You don't even have to buy one, there are several available FOR FREE, ONLINE. A quick google tells me that in addition to "commotion,"
ado, agitation, alarm, bouleversement, brouhaha, bustle, clamor, clatter, confusion, convulsion, disorder, disturbance, excitement, flap, flare, flourish, flurry, fluster, fracas, fray, furore, fuss, heat, hubbub, hurly-burly, hurry, pandemonium, perturbation, pother, racket, revolt, riot, row, stir, storm, tumult, turbulence, turmoil, unrest, upheaval, uprising, uproar, agitation, disorder, helter-skelter, stir, tumult, turbulence, turmoil, and uproar are all alternatives available for your use. Certainly, all of them are not applicable, but this list should help you avoid the use of the same word FIVE TIMES in three short paragraphs.